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The Madcap

(374 posts)
Sat Nov 16, 2024, 03:40 PM Saturday

Winter

The leaves have fallen
Trees spindly armed fight the wind
Cold from the North, biting frost
Cuts through the remains of the grassland
Snow, travelling horizontal razors
Slicing the eyes pointed northward
As Winter invades
The conquered defenders of Autumn

All things must die
Limbs slowly frozen
Heat pulled away
Blood becomes ice
And all life fades to black
In the last Winter
And all that we are disappears into time
Never to see Spring again

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This is part of the first poem I posted here - "Seasons." I wrote this part when I was thinking about nuclear winter for some reason. It's the one I consider my best.

This will be my last one for a bit until I can come up with some more that are worthwhile to post. (I have lots more, but they're not very good, unfortunately). Thanks to everyone who has read these, as I appreciate your patience with my amateurish ramblings.

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Winter (Original Post) The Madcap Saturday OP
Really good, great imagery Walleye Saturday #1
Definitely not "amateurish rambling". So much of your poetry has described how I feel but don't have your LoisB Saturday #2
Thank you The Madcap Saturday #3

LoisB

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2. Definitely not "amateurish rambling". So much of your poetry has described how I feel but don't have your
Sat Nov 16, 2024, 04:46 PM
Saturday

ability to put into words. I hope you don't take too long a break. I also appreciate your musical selections.

The Madcap

(374 posts)
3. Thank you
Sat Nov 16, 2024, 05:52 PM
Saturday

I just have to see where things go and what inspires me to write something down. These poems are usually spontaneous and take about 15 minutes to write. I'm no craftsman. Usually I write the whole thing and then sometimes come back and change a word or two.

For example, I have long struggled with the second line of the second verse on this one. I started with "Frozen in time," then "Frozen forever," and now "Limbs slowly frozen." "Frozen in time" repeated the "time" at the end and contradicted the "disappears into time," as did the "Frozen forever." "Limbs slowly frozen" emphasizes the process of freezing. Everything else is from the original.

Regarding the music, I've always pretty much been a prog rock fan with interests in classical music as well. Mahler was the ultimate classical progger in my book.

Thank you for your encouragement.

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