Poetry

Harker

(16,087 posts) Fri Oct 30, 2020, 01:26 PM Oct 2020

Haiku for you.

the first snow

clings to brown oak leaves

gravity

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Haiku for you. (Original Post) Harker Oct 2020 OP

Excellent! soothsayer Oct 2020 #1

Good one, soothsayer lillypaddle Oct 2020 #4

Nice! Harker Oct 2020 #12

that is not haiku / wrong number of syllables / but still beautiful unblock Oct 2020 #2

3-5-3... 5-7-5 Harker Oct 2020 #5

Most commonly, a Haiku is 5- 7- 5 lillypaddle Oct 2020 #6

I'm sometimes known as a loon. Harker Oct 2020 #11

I was going to suggest that you are a "lune" lillypaddle Oct 2020 #14

I always have an ear for corn! n/t Harker Oct 2020 #21

You toss these things out, like they're nothing lillypaddle Oct 2020 #3

haiku can be fun /once you get the hang of it / like riding a bike! unblock Oct 2020 #7

... Harker Oct 2020 #9

Well... Harker Oct 2020 #8

This is an interesting link lillypaddle Oct 2020 #10

Yes. Harker Oct 2020 #17

Loon! lillypaddle Oct 2020 #20

I have far to go. Harker Oct 2020 #22

I could write a rhyme Atticus Oct 2020 #13

Good to see you here lillypaddle Oct 2020 #15

... Harker Oct 2020 #18

When some hear "Haiku" Atticus Oct 2020 #16

That's what I say when anyone speaks of cashews. Harker Oct 2020 #19

Excellent! 👏👏👏👏 SheltieLover Oct 2020 #23

Thank you! You're very kind. Harker Oct 2020 #24

Awwww ty SheltieLover Oct 2020 #25

I'll look for them. Harker Oct 2020 #26

Ooooh I love this one! SheltieLover Oct 2020 #27

I was encouraged by Harker Oct 2020 #28

soothsayer

(38,601 posts)

1. Excellent!

Reply to Harker (Original post)

Fri Oct 30, 2020, 01:34 PM

Oct 2020

Donald Trump

Clings to Tuesday hopes

Fantasy

lillypaddle

(9,605 posts)

4. Good one, soothsayer

Reply to soothsayer (Reply #1)

Fri Oct 30, 2020, 01:38 PM

Oct 2020

Harker

(16,087 posts)

12. Nice!

Reply to soothsayer (Reply #1)

Fri Oct 30, 2020, 01:54 PM

Oct 2020

Forsooth!

unblock

(54,996 posts)

2. that is not haiku / wrong number of syllables / but still beautiful

Reply to Harker (Original post)

Fri Oct 30, 2020, 01:34 PM

Oct 2020

Harker

(16,087 posts)

5. 3-5-3... 5-7-5

Reply to unblock (Reply #2)

Fri Oct 30, 2020, 01:42 PM

Oct 2020

rules mean nothing to me sometimes!

lillypaddle

(9,605 posts)

6. Most commonly, a Haiku is 5- 7- 5

Reply to unblock (Reply #2)

Fri Oct 30, 2020, 01:43 PM

Oct 2020

However, a fixed-form 5-3-5 syllable (or 3-5-3 word) haiku is sometimes known as a lune.

Harker

(16,087 posts)

11. I'm sometimes known as a loon.

Reply to lillypaddle (Reply #6)

Fri Oct 30, 2020, 01:53 PM

Oct 2020

And who am I to argue.

This was my first original post, though I've been around since the days of Bob Boudelang. You inspired me.

lillypaddle

(9,605 posts)

14. I was going to suggest that you are a "lune"

Reply to Harker (Reply #11)

Fri Oct 30, 2020, 01:57 PM

Oct 2020

but I thought it was too corny to do so.

Harker

(16,087 posts)

21. I always have an ear for corn! n/t

Reply to lillypaddle (Reply #14)

Fri Oct 30, 2020, 02:07 PM

Oct 2020

lillypaddle

(9,605 posts)

3. You toss these things out, like they're nothing

Reply to Harker (Original post)

Fri Oct 30, 2020, 01:35 PM

Oct 2020

You're very good.

unblock

(54,996 posts)

7. haiku can be fun /once you get the hang of it / like riding a bike!

Reply to lillypaddle (Reply #3)

Fri Oct 30, 2020, 01:44 PM

Oct 2020

Harker

(16,087 posts)

9. ...

Reply to unblock (Reply #7)

Fri Oct 30, 2020, 01:48 PM

Oct 2020

hang on tight

the road is bumpy

but ride free

Harker

(16,087 posts)

8. Well...

Reply to lillypaddle (Reply #3)

Fri Oct 30, 2020, 01:44 PM

Oct 2020

awakened

I distill my thoughts

thanks to you

lillypaddle

(9,605 posts)

10. This is an interesting link

Reply to Harker (Original post)

Fri Oct 30, 2020, 01:52 PM

Oct 2020

comparing differences among haiku, senyru, and tanka.. I have never created a tanka, but maybe I will try.

https://akitahaiku.com/what-are-haiku-senryu-and-tanka/

ETA: Scroll down to read the 43 thoughts on “What are Haiku, Senryu and Tanka?”

Harker

(16,087 posts)

17. Yes.

Reply to lillypaddle (Reply #10)

Fri Oct 30, 2020, 02:01 PM

Oct 2020

I think Robert Reilly summed it up very nicely.

As a child, I played with Tanka toys.

lillypaddle

(9,605 posts)

20. Loon!

Reply to Harker (Reply #17)

Fri Oct 30, 2020, 02:05 PM

Oct 2020

Harker

(16,087 posts)

22. I have far to go.

Reply to lillypaddle (Reply #20)

Fri Oct 30, 2020, 02:10 PM

Oct 2020

A couple of nights ago I was practicing my Great Horned Owl voice, and got a reply from a nearby tree.

Atticus

(15,124 posts)

13. I could write a rhyme

Reply to Harker (Original post)

Fri Oct 30, 2020, 01:57 PM

Oct 2020

But why let sound constrain me
When I long to fly

lillypaddle

(9,605 posts)

15. Good to see you here

Reply to Atticus (Reply #13)

Fri Oct 30, 2020, 01:59 PM

Oct 2020

a familiar face.

Nice Haiku.

Harker

(16,087 posts)

18. ...

Reply to Atticus (Reply #13)

Fri Oct 30, 2020, 02:04 PM

Oct 2020

flap your wings

one must work to soar

without drafts

Atticus

(15,124 posts)

16. When some hear "Haiku"

Reply to Harker (Original post)

Fri Oct 30, 2020, 02:01 PM

Oct 2020

They look somewhat bewildered
And say "Gesundheit!"

Harker

(16,087 posts)

19. That's what I say when anyone speaks of cashews.

Reply to Atticus (Reply #16)

Fri Oct 30, 2020, 02:05 PM

Oct 2020

It's funny once, I'm told.

SheltieLover

(66,569 posts)

23. Excellent! 👏👏👏👏

Reply to Harker (Original post)

Fri Oct 30, 2020, 07:56 PM

Oct 2020

Ty for sharing!

Harker

(16,087 posts)

24. Thank you! You're very kind.

Reply to SheltieLover (Reply #23)

Fri Oct 30, 2020, 08:06 PM

Oct 2020

I've just joined up for the Poetry forum, so I'll pass them on from time to time as they.come to me.

I'm going to enjoy reading what others are seeing, thinking, and feeling as they write, too, so please don't be shy.

SheltieLover

(66,569 posts)

25. Awwww ty

Reply to Harker (Reply #24)

Fri Oct 30, 2020, 08:11 PM

Oct 2020

I love to write haiku & senryu!

Harker

(16,087 posts)

26. I'll look for them.

Reply to SheltieLover (Reply #25)

Fri Oct 30, 2020, 08:19 PM

Oct 2020

no limits

music of nature

on the wind

SheltieLover

(66,569 posts)

27. Ooooh I love this one!

Reply to Harker (Reply #26)

Fri Oct 30, 2020, 08:27 PM

Oct 2020

I used to carry a notebook & pen, but my muses literally would not stop feeding them to me. The more I wrote, the faster they manifested through my pen.

I couldn't keep up, literally.

So I had to abandon the notebook.

Maybe I crank it back up.

Ty for the encouragement!

Harker

(16,087 posts)

28. I was encouraged by

Reply to SheltieLover (Reply #27)

Fri Oct 30, 2020, 08:46 PM

Oct 2020

lillypaddle this morning, and now the spring is flowing for me, too. Pass it on!

I had a journal that I stared at for weeks, and in which I made but one entry about Claude the cat, and his relationship with my vacuum cleaner.

This was maybe 35 years ago.

Time for me to get another. I've just retired, and there's much to enjoy.

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